I have been working on revising this draft for longer than I care to admit. Out of the set of 6 retellings of myths I have done so far, three have been published or are scheduled for publication. This one is the most recent writing and I want to get it ready for being out in the world! I’d like to spend some of this workshop finally getting the chapbook ready to also enter the world as well.
Ok, my turn for slow comments.
Overall, I think this tightens us everything from the previous version I read. I think it all flows really well not and I’m no longer lost in the beginning. That being said, I’m still a little uncomfortable with getting a pronoun ‘her’ before we get her name ‘Ariadne’. Honestly, that was the only thing that stuck out to me reading it with a memory of last time.
There are a few little line edit kind of things that I suspect other’s eyes are better suited for than mine, but I hope you send this one out into the world to join its siblings soon!