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When I am with Eric, I feel safe

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I have gone back and recrafted parts of my novel.  I want to market it once I retire.



   
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Here are my comments! : D



   
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Hi Marc! I’m loving the rework of this scene. I only had one significant piece of feedback, and that’s the the transition from Dolores as the narrator to Eric as the narrator. This version is polished. It’s intimate, sweet, sad, and hopeful at the same time. I’m really glad to get to see all the transformations that this piece of writing has gone through in our workshop time.



   
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